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Spring's weather is shine is comfortable and wind is kind.
The trees are tall and grass is flowers are e're yellow,red and birds whit the Spring are dancing in the sky or singing song in the trees.
I like the Spring.
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Spring is coming. Look around my neighborhood. It's beautiful.
In spring, weather is fine. The sun shines brightly and wind blows gently. The trees are tall and grass is green. Many flowers are blossoming. We can see yellow, red and pink. The birds are dancing in the sky or singing song in the trees. I like the spring.
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